Post by rainbowcupcake on May 24, 2015 22:59:59 GMT
Okay, so I mentioned this already in the other thread, and Mikau said to post it here, so that's what I'm doing.
It's this one scene (or part of it) where I'm not sure where it falls on the rating scale. It's basically a description of someone that was partly hit by a very close explosion.
With that in mind, please don't read the spoiler tagged stuff, if things like that make you uncomfortable. The thing is, if I want it to be a competition entry (and I would very much like that), I need to stay within T range.
It's not exactly the final version of the scene, but it should give you an idea of where it's headed, and yeah, basically what I need to know is: Is it too much (for T rating)? Because I actually wanted to go into even more detail, but that's when I realized that I have to keep the rating in mind, so I wanted to get a second opinion first before I finish it.
It's this one scene (or part of it) where I'm not sure where it falls on the rating scale. It's basically a description of someone that was partly hit by a very close explosion.
With that in mind, please don't read the spoiler tagged stuff, if things like that make you uncomfortable. The thing is, if I want it to be a competition entry (and I would very much like that), I need to stay within T range.
It's not exactly the final version of the scene, but it should give you an idea of where it's headed, and yeah, basically what I need to know is: Is it too much (for T rating)? Because I actually wanted to go into even more detail, but that's when I realized that I have to keep the rating in mind, so I wanted to get a second opinion first before I finish it.
{Spoiler: Click to view/hide}His legs … his legs are gone, he doesn't know where they are, but they're gone, nothing but bloody stumps left behind. Flesh is melting and bubbling and his face is a red and pussy mess and his hands are black and he looks like a monster, but it's his oyaji and he can't leave him and everything is spinning. He reaches out, repulsed and relieved at the same time, and he's choking on his own sobs. They're going to die, they're both going to die, but at least they're together. And he laughs and cries at the same time, because his oyaji only has one eyebrow now and it looks stupid and the eye underneath is melting