Finnian Donovan
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Dec 23, 2014 16:41:39 GMT
I present to you all, the product of my twisted imagination. I'm pretty sure Natsumi has heard of my plans a quite a few times already. Here's a basic run-down of the story, I'm planning to entitle Essence of Humanity: The Black Org's intention was never to gain immortality but to produce the ultimate killing machine through genetic manipulations. The story starts off following the plot of the very first episode of DC. From there, I've got two routes to choose from. Either (a) Ran finds Shinichi after he underwent his transformation or (b) Shinichi gets taken by Gin and Vodka to be trained only to be later deemed a failure and thus need to be eliminated. Need help deciding which route is better... Anyway, I am quite happy with the outcome. Let me tell you, DCMK eyes are hard to draw! Trying to merge both InuYasha and DCMK art style is even harder! Goodness, it took me around 15 minutes of just comparing between the two styles before I managed to sketch a draft out. That aside, what do you guys think of Shin-chan? Did I manage to keep his most defining features (besides the cowlick)? Does he look InuYasha enough while still being recognisable? NOTE: Click the thumbnail for a larger view. I had a hard time figuring that out when I first started...
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Post by Mikauzoran on Dec 23, 2014 20:39:51 GMT
Wow! That looks awesome! I think he looks way more like Inu Yasha, though. I can see Shinichi in the cowlick and the face a little, but it definite looks more like Yasha. I think it's the long hair that's doing it. If I hadn't been told it was a Shinichi Yasha hybrid, I don't know that I would have been able to tell it was Shinichi.
Anyway, as for the plot, I don't see why you can't do both. Have the Org take him initially for training, declare him a failure, and have him escape and let Ran find him in his transformed state.
That's just my opinion, though. Honestly, awesome job!
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Post by Nikudou Natsumi on Dec 23, 2014 22:48:07 GMT
That's cool! I really like it! I don't know about whether there's enough Shinichi in it or not, though. You'd have to ask someone else. And I agree with Mikau's idea
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Dec 23, 2014 23:21:10 GMT
Kara, Natsumi, I have to agree with you guys. There is more Yasha influence than Shinichi in there. It was kinda intentional though. Yasha's defining features are his long hair and puppy ears. Take the long hair out and you end up with merely another hanyou. The only reason I would even consider the story I'm in the process of writing as a crossover is because of Shinichi's appearance and tendencies.
Also, how about the idea of him being abducted at the age of twelve instead of the typical Tropical land beginning? It would make him more like Yasha, i.e. more brash and untrusting of others. Not entirely sure of that plot beginning though... Your thoughts guys?
One more thing, should I keep Yasha's colour scheme (white hair, amber eyes) or should I at least keep Shinichi's brown hair to differentiate him a bit?
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Post by Mikauzoran on Dec 24, 2014 0:53:34 GMT
You can call me Mikau. I mainly just use the name "Kara" in my signature. I like it a lot because it shares the same kanji as "sora" for "sky", but when pronounced "kara" it means "empty". Mostly I just go by Mikau. I only use both names when I'm signing something, and that's only because it's a ten year long habit.
Anyway, wait. Is he supposed to be Inu Yasha or Shinichi? Maybe I missed something. Let me make sure we're on the same page. So, he was Kudo Shinichi up until the point in time when the Org captured him and tried to make him into a weapon? Now, do they give him the drug that makes him Inu Yasha-y in order to make him a weapon, or do they give him the drug after they decide he's a failure in order to get rid of him and it just so happens to turn him into Inu Yasha?
Also, is this actually going to be a crossover with more of the Yasha characters and universe (jewel shards and demons and the like), or is this just a "crossover" because Shinichi's going to look like Inu Yasha?
It's your story, but I think you should stick with the Tropical Land opening. If Shinichi just disappears at age twelve, you don't have the romantic relationship established with Ran yet, and that will shift the relationship dynamic when Shinichi shows up four or five years later looking absolutely nothing like himself.
Maybe if you want the Org to take him from Tropical Land when he's sixteen and keep him for a year or two, you can still have his time in captivity affect his personality, but then you've got the romantic relationship established with Ran.
I think the big difference in the relationship is that if he disappears when he's twelve, for Ran it's more like a really good friend is gone. If he disappears at sixteen, it's the guy that she likes and you'll have a similar relationship dynamic to what we see in canon.
What genre are you writing? Where exactly are you going with this? Is this a romance where you plan on focusing on Shinichi and Ran figuring things out and trying to put his life back together? Or is this going to have more of an action/mystery/suspense feel to it like the manga? Are you focusing on relationships or is this about Shinichi taking down the organization? ^.^; It's hard to give my advice about what route you should take when I'm not sure where exactly you want to go.
As for appearance, I think Shinichi should keep his brown hair and blue eyes so that he's at least a little bit recognizable. Unless you wanted to play the "Ran can look past the outer appearance and see Shinichi inside" card. Also, if the transformation happened as a result of the drug that was administered by the Org intending to kill Shinichi, it might be best if you went with the white hair and amber eyes in order to make him less recognizable.
Those are my thoughts. Sorry. I can't do any better until I know where exactly you're heading with this.
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Dec 24, 2014 1:32:48 GMT
Okay Mikau it is then! Sorry. The image is supposed to be of Shinichi after his genetic material had been tampered with by the Black Org. Even after the transformation, he identifies himself as Shinichi although he'd been dubbed as the killing perfection/Sesshoumaru.
They end up deeming him a failure because he refuses to kill anyone unless he loses control of his inner beast (no supernatural powers involved in any of my stories).
It's a crossover, I guess, because a lot of themes from IY would be explored. Shinichi has to deal with the fact that he cannot wash his hands of the bloodshed he had caused. He also has to face the fact that he is merely 'half-human' now (at least according to him). And losing control is definitely something he is ashamed of. Did I mention that I may change around events quite a bit? I'm planning to have Ai as the older sibling who inevitably takes the drug not because of a suicide attempt but in order to escape with Akemi alive?
I think I'll go with your idea. Gin and Vodka were there not because of an illegal transaction but because it was a setup to abduct Shinichi with the knowledge that his genetic make up would allow for a high survival rate.
I also want to explore Shinichi and Ran's relationship now that he's changed. As for the genre, I'm planning to go along the same vein as the manga and a bit of OMAT thrown in there.
As for Shin-chan's appearance, I think I'll keep the brown hair but have his eyes change to amber. It would make for an interesting combination...
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Post by neonquincy1217 on Dec 24, 2014 6:54:28 GMT
Wow, that's an excellent idea!~ So, prior to Shinichi's abduction, he'd be suspicious and/or go through some kind of paranoid phase where he thinks someone's watching/following him (when in fact there really is)... His mental state allowed for a rather easier capture, then. And then comes that fateful day in Tropical Land. He gets drugged, abducted and then deemed a failure later. Am I interpreting the thing correctly? *sigh* I wish I watched the Inu Yasha series. I should like to contribute something too but unfortunately I'm not familiar with it
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Post by assasin8 on Dec 26, 2014 21:00:33 GMT
This is really amazing! I already love the concept, and it seems to incorporate elements of both series rather well. I wonder how the plots would be different in the cases of both shows... also, how would everyone else be cast? Haibara's part is already pretty interesting! Great job with the picture!
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Jan 7, 2015 7:12:55 GMT
Hi guys! I just got back from my family vacation to Perth WA. It was a needed 12 day rest and I feel quite refreshed and ready to do something productive. Just got back to Melbourne today and I was so excited to start shading in my Shinichi/InuYasha hybrid. I ended up going with four different combinations of hair and eye colour and I wanted your input on which would suit best. I had gone and written out a mock-up intro some time ago and I thought of going along with the amber eyes, silver hair route. At the tender age of 16, Kudo Shinichi, the boy deemed to be the Holmes of the 21st Century, had mysteriously vanished from society. No one knew where he had gone, not even his parents. Some say he had enough of the limelight. Some even said he had died.
So why was it that Mouri Ran, his childhood friend, thought otherwise? Why was she so adamant that the high school detective was alive? Because one rainy day, she had found an odd-looking boy lying prone in front of her father's agency.
With the boy being delirious and on the brink of death, Ran had only moments to think before she decided to take him inside. Only then did she notice the silver locks of hair cascading down past his shoulders. Only then did she notice eyes of molten gold.
Only then did she notice puppy dog ears pressed closely against the boy's skull. Only then did she finally hear what the boy had been saying--her name--over and over again. That was when she knew he had returned to her.
The questions could come later, right now, she was just glad to find the person who completed her.
As Mikau stated, I could go with Ran looking past Shinichi's altered appearance. However, the very procedure that turned him into a genetic anomaly also caused this transition from blue eyes to amber and brown hair to white. If Shinichi keeps his appearance, it wouldn't take long for the Syndicate to find him. Dying his hair brown and using blue contacts would defeat the purpose of hiding since he would look like his younger self with the exception of longer hair. The only other option would then to keep his amber eyes as they are and dye his hair brown. Either that or choose a lighter shade to throw the B.O. off his trail. Still, I do take the aesthetics of the combinations into consideration and I would probably change some of the things around the combination you guys help me with. As for why Shinichi wouldn't cut his hair, its primarily because it's a painful reminder of what he could have been--a well-known detective--and what he had become--an abomination of nature who kills others in order to prevent the deaths of his parents and Ran's own family. From a narrative viewpoint, I thought it would be more painful and interesting to delve into the mindset of a Shinichi who had to murder people in order keep Ran alive. Several things could stem from that too. It would also mean that I have find another reason why he was deemed a failure, considering he is bound to do the B.O's bidding... Any suggestions on this part would be highly appreciated! As a side note, I had chosen to revise my original line-art (like I normally do anyway *facepalm*) as the eyes kept bugging me. In such light, I decided to re-draw them and delineate them to a somewhat better approximation of how eyes are drawn in DCMK.
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Jan 7, 2015 7:14:31 GMT
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Post by Nikudou Natsumi on Jan 7, 2015 13:15:36 GMT
The eyes look much better ^-^ I like the top one best.
Question: how would he hide his ears?
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Post by Mikauzoran on Jan 8, 2015 2:29:11 GMT
I like the brown hair and amber eyes or the white hair and blue eyes best.
Okay, so whatever the Organization did to Shinichi left him with white hair and amber eyes, right? So that's what he looked like the last time that they saw him. Therefore, based on that, if he wanted to hide in Japan, it would be better for him to have brown/black hair so that he'd blend in. So the white hair is definitely completely out if you want to say that whatever you end up choosing is "to hide from the Black Organization". If he kept the white hair, it would cause a stir, attract attention, and be visible from an airplane in Japan.
Also, realistically speaking, Japanese people don't have blue eyes unless maybe both parents were halves or something and carried the recessive gene for blue eyes. So technically, if you wanted Shinichi to stick out less, he'd have dark brown/black eyes. If we want to pretend that DC Japan is real Japan, then blue eyes would attract less attention since EVERYONE in the anime has some shade of blue/purple/green eyes except Hakuba, strangely enough. Okay, maybe that's a gross overstatement, but eyes of a blue variety are far more prevalent than the more realistic brown/black.
As for what you said about not wanting to do the brown hair blue eyes because you thought that he'd look too much like his younger appearance, I don't think the way he looks now in the pictures looks much like Shinichi, so he should be fine. He might want to stay indoors unless he has a disguise on, though, even if he does dye his hair and/or wear colored contacts because those simple changes alone are not going to keep the Org from recognizing him. I think the first place they'll come looking for him is back with his friends and family, so that's another issue you'll have to address.
On that note, I really like the artwork. The background was just the right touch, and they turned out lovely! Good job, and good luck with your writing!
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Jan 9, 2015 17:15:13 GMT
Guys! I've finally achieved something I've been dreaming of! I actually managed to cell shade my artwork's hair properly!! I'll have to properly reply to you later Mikau and Niku but before I hit the bed for some shut-eye, here's my fully finished artworks (very first ones...)
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Post by Finnian Donovan on Jan 9, 2015 17:16:18 GMT
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Post by assasin8 on Jan 13, 2015 22:50:26 GMT
Whoa... The shading seems to make ALL the difference. I don't get it, how are you doing this? It's really cool reading the whole message board and seeing how the drawing evolved! The latest two here look really amazing, and the final product really reflects all the hard work put into it!
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