Kaggami
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I´m freezing in my own house... winter, no one invited you yet!
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Post by Kaggami on Mar 24, 2015 21:33:28 GMT
This was the third time I started to write the damn story and never had the chance to finish.... This time... I will finish!!!!! Next week I have a small break, so I better use it well... XD
Immortal Kaito... *shivers* Now that is a horribly wonderful idea... XD
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Post by Nikudou Natsumi on Mar 24, 2015 22:19:59 GMT
I don't know, maybe a writing issue? All the sentences just seem awkward. Maybe I just don't know how to write angst . . .
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Post by ichthyophobia on Mar 24, 2015 22:37:45 GMT
I can't speak to the genre. But in general, if all the sentences seem awkward, check the sentence lengths and the sentence types. If all the sentences are long (20+ words), break some of them up; overly long sentences are difficult to focus through, and in general you want a balance of long, medium, and short sentences. (Unless you're using the sentence length to control the speed of perceived time in the story but that's a whole other topic.)
As far as sentence type, variation is important, especially in how the sentences start. For example, if everything starts with "he was" "he did" "it was", that real fast subject-verb structure that leaves the rest of the information to the predicate, it can start to feel stilted and unnatural. Just mix the structure up to see if anything starts to flow better.
...Hopefully that helps.
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Post by Nikudou Natsumi on Mar 24, 2015 23:00:29 GMT
. . . I think it's more like I don't know how to describe what's happening. I think I'll change how I'm approaching it and have it start out after the event happened, but with flashbacks.
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fory
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Post by fory on Mar 25, 2015 7:31:58 GMT
as someone who really likes interaction and dialogue in fics I'm having a hard time coming up with anything for this prompt. xD;; *sweats*
the immortal Kaito idea breaks my heart
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Post by TinyTantei on Mar 25, 2015 9:05:38 GMT
*awkward coughing*
The immortal Kaito idea is close to being scrapped for me, actually. Too much angst can only lead to...more angst...and more angst...and that isn't particularly good for the state of my nervous system. So if that doesn't pan out, then I have to go search for another plunny.
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Kaggami
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Post by Kaggami on Mar 25, 2015 10:15:54 GMT
Immortal Kaito, while it could be fun for a while, since he could do all this crazy tricks without dying. However, I always imagine Kaito surrounded by people he loves, and I think it would break him to watch them leave, while he continues to live on... TT.TT God, just talking about it makes me sad... No, no immortal Kaito for me...
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Jennosaur
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"Everything was ok bc it didn't matter. But deep down it wasn't okay, because it really did matter"
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Post by Jennosaur on Mar 25, 2015 23:29:40 GMT
Sounds like a really good theme! Maybe I'll enter If only I wasn't so lazy........
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Post by Nikudou Natsumi on Mar 26, 2015 0:09:49 GMT
Challenge yourself then, Jenny. Try your best! If needed, you don't have to worry about the deadline; you can always post it as a regular fanfic. But then again, the deadline might encourage you to get it done.
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Post by StarlightDragons on Mar 26, 2015 1:27:13 GMT
I swear that one day I will reach the time in which it is possible for me to join in more than just one contest every six months
...today is not that day, and it probably won't come until summer break. darnit.
meanwhile, best wishes to everyone!
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Post by Mikauzoran on Mar 29, 2015 3:48:22 GMT
*Stares at "Alone" contest theme*
Now what the hell am I gonna do for you? I'm just not feeling it.
Oh great and powerful plot bunnies, come out from under the bed and smite me with your awesomeness!
...Nope. Nothing. ^.^;
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Post by LaurelWreath on Mar 31, 2015 14:45:37 GMT
I'm not all that certain it's long enough, but I was successful in finishing a story for this theme. <--[Conan's response] It's called MASKS. It's in the Detective Conan fanfiction archive.
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Post by Nikudou Natsumi on Apr 1, 2015 0:02:26 GMT
As for me, I'm . . . a paragraph and two halves in. And I still can't think of a plot . . . Maybe it's okay if it doesn't have a plot. Just Kaito angst. But I'm not good with angst. *sighs*
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Post by Mikauzoran on Apr 1, 2015 0:35:54 GMT
Well, Hakuba came to me at work today and started telling me an interesting story. We'll have to see if he decides to tell me the whole thing. He's a little capricious and given to shifting moods. But I might have something after all. No angst for me this time. ^.~
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Post by fory on Apr 1, 2015 13:00:42 GMT
Urks. I'm sure inspiration will hit me like... when the contest is over or something. xD Until then I'm looking forward to what everyone else will come up with :33
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